Keira

4 Responses to “Keira”

  1. keirawriter says:

    My fingers slowly pressed the keys of our piano. I played our song the keys knew the song so well that it felt like Joanne was playing too. a press was against my cheek , It was Joanne’s kiss .

  2. freyawriter says:

    Good use of speech marks but remember to put punctuation before the end speech marks and new speaker requires a new line. i should be a capital letter as should proper nouns eg Lucy. re-read your work to ensure you put full stops in.
    broken teacups with fresh ,scoulding tea over a boring metallic desk so we knew people live here . This should be a sentence but doesnt make sense but it does have a good adjectives, (broken and scolding).

  3. rosiewriter says:

    🙂 Well done
    Just remember an ‘I’ in the middle of a sentence is a capital letter.
    Good description within your work.

  4. keirawriter says:

    “Get off ” i exclaimed , broken teacups with fresh ,scoulding tea over a boring metallic desk so we knew people live here .”What are those’ lucy exclamied as she heard a roar “LETS GET OUT OF HERE ! ” she shrieked just as i grabbed her hand ” its my phone ” i said Lucy exhaled “its grandma ” i whisperd lucy took my phone “where are you ” gramdma muttered “who’s down there ” hissed a shadow

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